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In modern times, people are under more stress than ever. This has a negative impact on their well-being. State some of the causes and suggest possible solutions.

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Nowadays,
people
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 are facing a higher
level
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 of
stress
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 than ever before. It leads to a negative influence on their health states. The main cause of
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 is high work pressure and the working capacity of the
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 and the best solution is limiting working
hours
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 and
brain
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 leisure. One certain factor of the
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stress
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level
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 is that the majority spend most of their
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 on work and difficulty on high pressure from the employers.
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 the increasing working
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 in many countries, the
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 of
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 is increasing year by year and it contributes to many physical and mental illnesses,
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 obesity and depression.
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, after working or studying our
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 requires leisure, but
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, we are spending the rest of our
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 watching TV or scrolling the internet. Living
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 a lifestyle our
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 does not have opportunities to reduce the
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level
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.
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, limiting the working
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 could improve that situation and make business and society happier. Governments should create a law regulation that will not allow employers to force their employees to work more than 6 or 8
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 per day.
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, it will allow
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 to spend more
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 with family, friends or in nature.
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, countries should educate
people
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 on how to direct their
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 to the right things,
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 as doing sports exercising, walking or meditating.
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 National University of Health researched that individuals who were completing sport exercise on a regular basis handled
stress
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 easier more than 25% than the majority who did not. In conclusion,
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 decreasing working
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 can lead to slow economic growth but will allow
people
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 to live a calmer life and right
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 resting will help to minimize
stress
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 levels.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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