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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The provided diagram indicate the amounts of store that closed and opened in one country in 2011 and 2018.
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, for most of the period, the number of closing
stores
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 was higher than that of new
stores
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.
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, Those of closing
stores
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 and new
stores
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 considerably fluctuated throughout the period. In 2011, the figure for
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openings
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 stood at around 8500. In 2012, that of
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openings
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 plunged to almost 4000 before increasing to nearly 6000 in 2014. Meanwhile,
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of
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shop
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closures
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 oscillated between 2011 and 2014. In 2014, the number of
shop
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closures
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 was higher than that of
shop
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openings
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, which was close to 6000. In 2015, that of
shop
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closures
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 reached its lowest point at about 500, being less than that of
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openings
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, with around 4000, before surging to roughly 5000 in 2016. In 2016 and 2018, that of
shop
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closures
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 vacillated, and it was more than that of
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openings
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 in 2018, with approximately 5000.
Also
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, In 2018,
that
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of
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apply
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shop
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openings
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 hit rock bottom at close to 3000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stores, shop, openings, closures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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