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The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Three pie charts are given in which the first
chart
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 illustrates the
world
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's spending. The second
chart
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 depicts the
world
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's
population
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whereas
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 the third
chart
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 shows how much
resources
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 are being consumed.
To begin
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 with, the
world
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 is spending 24% on food, 18% on transport, 12% on housing and 6% on clothing but the
huge
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largest
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 amount of spending of the
world
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 is on miscellaneous objects around 40%.
Furthermore
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, the data provided in the pie
chart
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 exhibits that Asia has the highest
population
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 in the
world
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 i.e. 57%, Europe has 14%, America
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 has 14% and Africa has 10% of the
population
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 of the
world
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.
In addition
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, the
resources
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 are distributed unequally. The third
chart
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 shows that the USA and Europe consume around 60% of
resources
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 and 40% of
resources
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 are consumed by others but the USA and Europe have the lowest
population
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 around 28%.
On the other hand
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, Asia has the highest
population
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 but its consumption of
resources
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 is very low.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, world, population, resources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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