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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is predicted that for the next few years, the
paper
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 version of
books
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 and newspapers will not be as popular as it is in these days and individuals can find their desired writings and
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 online for free.
This
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 essay partially agrees with
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 statement. I believe
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 with the advances of technology following the
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 via social media will be more convenient, some individuals are not comfortable reading
books
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 on devices and would rather buy printed ones. On the one hand, online broadcasting channels publish the
news
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 way faster than newspapers which are printed every morning. By developing internet infrastructures, it will be easy to spread the information all over the world just after it happens.
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 to
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, readers can pay less for buying a book online
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 the noticeable cost of producing
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.
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, J.K Rowling published her latest work "Harry Potter and the Cursed Child" in an online version.
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, reading
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 on laptops and phones can be problematic for some people. These electronic devices tire eyes and they prevent people from reading for a long time.
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, printed
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 allow readers to highlight them and
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 write some notes on the sides.
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, students need to solve mathematics problems in front of the question and it can be challenging to look at the question on a different screen and solve them on
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.
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, it is believed that in the future getting the
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 and
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 reading
books
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 will be online
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 in my opinion, people's eyes can be affected by electronic devices and they would rather buy
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 ones.
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task response
Your response is mostly relevant to the task, presenting a partially agreeing position with well-developed arguments.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with a well-developed introduction and conclusion. However, some ideas could be linked more clearly within paragraphs to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is generally appropriate, but you could further vary your word choices and use more sophisticated vocabulary to enhance your essay.
grammatical range
Your essay demonstrates a good grasp of grammar and sentence structure, but there are a few minor errors that could be avoided to improve the overall clarity of your writing.
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