it is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

There are lots of risky tasks that
people
have to face in their both professional lives and personal lives. there will be some cases where we
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benefited
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but
also
some will drawbacks us. So, we can not say
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whether taking
risks
is more
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or
disadvantaged
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. First of all, taking
risk
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in professional lives is a 2-face knife. We can be really
succed
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successful
or dry out just after
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adventurous choice.
For example
, Warren Buffet
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is well known for his adventurous
investment
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but
while
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lots of
people
fall
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bankruptcy after an investment.
Although
taking
risks
is too risky, we should give
us
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them
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a try but still
in
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the control zone because it is
life
,
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we lose,
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sometime
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we
won
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but the important thing is to learn from
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failure when we lose. There is a famous quote about
this
: "I either win or learn". So
risk
is a chance to get rich but
also
a way to earn experience if we can
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.
Secondly
, taking
risk
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in personal
life
might
be
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more
advantaged
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advantages
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than disadvantages. Taking
ris
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risks
in personal
life
will help us
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to
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step out of our comfort zone which
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us
with
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the rest of the world.
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, some
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people
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out of their comfort zone,
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and conquered
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their fears
tomake
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to make
make
friend
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with
people
and for sure their
life
will be a lot better. There
also
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a growing trend which
people
pranking their partner or friends to check their loyalty. It is
also
a
risk
for
people
to take
this
because the pranked
people
will see you as an untrusty
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, they will
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of you or much worse
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not keep in touch with you anymore.
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, everything has two faces,
risks
are
not
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the
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exception. We should expect
of
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the results of taking
risks
, it is like a game, go on or go home. We should take
risks
but still
in
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control because
risks
is
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a chance to be better or to learn new things
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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