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Digital Communication Technology, such as emails, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for you answer and include examples.

#communication #technology #emails #instant #media #connections #people
With the advancements made in the technological field,
it
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there
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 is
with
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apply
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no doubt that communication has greatly improved between people. I strongly agree with
this
.
Firstly
, the advent of mobile phone devices has made communication easier and faster. People can talk to their loved ones via phone and video calls at anytime, anywhere and at their own convenience.
For instance
, a person in America can contact another in Ghana within a space of minutes as opposed to the past
where
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when
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 it took several months for written
lettters
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letters
 to be delivered across nations.
Also
,
news
 in one country spreads to the whole world within a short matter of time.
Thus
 through social media
news
 is shared across the globe with ease. To illustrate
this
, the death of Queen Elizabeth who lived in the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom
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 got to other countries through
news
 items broadcasted on popular
news
 houses. It was
also
 shared instantly on various social media platforms.
To sum up
, digital technology has improved our communication with respect to
news
 delivery and talking among loved ones.
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