More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other products from well-known brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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As time goes by, there are many people who want to own a lot of items and goods by buying in modern society. Particularly, most younger people always are willing to buy it immediately if it is possible. In the end, we are influenced a lot by some reasons. Some people argue that
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phenomenon has a profound negative impact on our generation. And I personally agree with
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statement. There is a saying I heard from a professor. "The bigger the power of capitalism is growing, the bigger the greed of generation is growing." From my perspective,
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statement is nearly true, because we all are living under human nature or maybe we just live with human nature without any resistance. The greed that we desire to buy some items or goods more and more,
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the science of the brain. But I partly stand with
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statement: "Capitalism has created many brands in
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world, and
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impact will continue unless all humans disappear one
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as Facebook, Instagram, TikTok, etc. They have changed a lot our whole life and even our
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of living. But there are advantages and disadvantages. We always post something every
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on Instagram or TikTok and we are influenced emotionally and mentally by that. We can't find someone who does not use smartphones or social
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. That can be a disadvantage probably. But as we can see, we define good advantages as well,
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as contact overseas very easily, using the Internet without costs. We can use social
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Technology in good ways.
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, the human nature does not work in that
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, If your friends are buying something you want,
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you want to buy it as well. If it is not possible, you are going to be jealous of your friends.
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these reasons, I believe, that capitalism and social
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are negative development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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