More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other products from well-known brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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As time goes by, there are many people who want to own a lot of items and goods by buying in modern society. Particularly, most younger people always are willing to buy it immediately if it is possible. In the end, we are influenced a lot by some reasons. Some people argue that

this

phenomenon has a profound negative impact on our generation. And I personally agree with

this

statement. There is a saying I heard from a professor. "The bigger the power of capitalism is growing, the bigger the greed of generation is growing." From my perspective,

this

statement is nearly true, because we all are living under human nature or maybe we just live with human nature without any resistance. The greed that we desire to buy some items or goods more and more,

day

is natural,

according to

the science of the brain. But I partly stand with

this

statement: "Capitalism has created many brands in

this

world, and

this

impact will continue unless all humans disappear one

day

" In some

way

, we are going to keep living

this

way

. And one of the biggest reasons is social

media

such

as Facebook, Instagram, TikTok, etc. They have changed a lot our whole life and even our

way

of living. But there are advantages and disadvantages. We always post something every

day

on Instagram or TikTok and we are influenced emotionally and mentally by that. We can't find someone who does not use smartphones or social

media

. That can be a disadvantage probably. But as we can see, we define good advantages as well,

such

as contact overseas very easily, using the Internet without costs. We can use social

media

Technology in good ways.

However

, the human nature does not work in that

way

For instance

, If your friends are buying something you want,

then

you want to buy it as well. If it is not possible, you are going to be jealous of your friends.

This

is so simple logic and principle.

Above all

these reasons, I believe, that capitalism and social

media

are negative development.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other products from well-known brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that it is more important to have an enjoyable job than to earn a lot of money. Others disagree and think that a good salary leads to a better life. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people are of the opinion that food should be transported from one place to the other, while others are of the opinion that people should consume locally produced food. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages