Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters is likely to result in societ of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it important for children to make decisions about matters affect them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There have been
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views about whether a child should decide on their daily concerns
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as clothes they will wear or food they will eat.
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some people think that it is important to let children
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decide on their own,
others
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think that they will become
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who just
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their
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own wishes. In my opinion, they should be given some freedom to make choices but there must be a limit. On
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side, there are people who believe
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children
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should not decide by
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themselves
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because they think they will raise as a person who will not care
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about other
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people’s opinions. These individuals may
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lack
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responsibility toward
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and cannot make
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for
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good.
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, they become a person who cannot compromise which may lead to conflicts throughout their lifetime. On the other side, some believe that it is significant for a child to decide on everyday matters. They think that it will enhance
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decision-making skills and promote independence.
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, they think that children will build up
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and freedom to express themselves.
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, children who are allowed to make their own choices may have a better understanding of the consequences of their actions. In my
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it is so essential to let
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children
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decide on everyday matters with certain limitations.
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childeren
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children
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to understand the importance of responsibility toward society and compromise with
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, it is
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essential to understand their identity,
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and develeo
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develop
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for their adult life. In conclusion, is it essential
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a child decide by themselves on everyday matters? Some
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that
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lead
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to self-centredness the
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think that
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is important for their growth. I strongly believe that it is important
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children’s be allowed to decide on their own within a reasonable limit to promote both
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and
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a sense
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of responsibility.
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