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You paid a refundable deposit when you rented an apartment. You left the apartment in good condition but the Landlord won't return your deposit. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter explain why you are writing ask for the return of your deposit inform the landlord of possible legal action

Dear Mr Brown, I am writing to request the pending bond refund that you have not yet paid, which has been due for 10 days. I have called your office twice
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 week, and I was told you do not intend to repay the money. Once, I was a tenant at room 303, Lotus Building, VIC 3135. It’s been more than 4 weeks since I moved out of the apartment on 10 October 2025. When I signed the lease, the conditions imposed were to make a refundable deposit, which would be returned if the property were in appropriate condition when I vacated it.
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, I’ve already consulted a lawyer, and he explained that upon receiving
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 letter, you have 5 days to make the deposit. If I do not receive the money, unfortunately, I may take legal action in order to get the funds back. I look forward to hearing from you. Kind regards, M J

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improve structure
Make the plan clear. Use three parts: intro, body, and end.
coherence
Keep one main idea in each paragraph. A new idea should start a new paragraph.
accuracy
Be exact about dates and facts. This helps trust.
tone
Use a more neutral tone when you say you will take action. Avoid strong words.
content
State a clear deadline for the refund and how you will act if it is not paid.
clarity
The letter has a formal goal and asks for the refund.
reliability
Gives some dates and facts to back the case.
tone
The closing is polite and shows respect.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • refundable deposit
  • rental agreement
  • amicably
  • tenancy
  • diligently maintained
  • legal proceedings
  • inspect
  • wear and tear
  • withhold
  • non-compliance
  • promptly
  • documented evidence
  • liability
  • small claims court
  • tenants' rights
  • non-negotiable
  • deadline
  • escalation
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