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The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005

The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005
The
map
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 illustrates how the seaside resort of Templeton had changed from 1990 to 2005. There had been several changes. The most noticeable
were
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was
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 the building of two new facilities. In 1990, there were a lot of private houses and trees as well, which is a trait of non-industrialized areas. In the north-west part of the
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map
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,map
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 we can see the school and the hospital. At the right corner of the
map
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, it can be seen that the railway station took place near the hospital. Turning to the 2005
map
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, the great majority of people are settled in flats
instead
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 of houses. Green areas were replaced by the factory,
while
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 a supermarket was built in
the previous houses area
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the area of the previous house
the area of the previous houses
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. the school and hospital still remain
as well as
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 the railway station, albeit with a ferry, which it did not have before. Another beneficial change is the airport construction,
although
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 it is not clear there is it exactly
located
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what located
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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