Some young people go to college or university to have a successful career path. Others, however, chose to go straight to work to gain real-life experience after high school. Discuss both views and write your opinion.
In today's society , There is
on going
debate regarding Correct your spelling
ongoing
choice
between entering Add an article
the choice
workforce
or Add an article
the workforce
continue
to study in college or Wrong verb form
continuing
university
after high school. some people believe that studying further
has more advantages while
others argue against that. This
essay will further
elaborate both
Change preposition
on both
the
sides and will reach to conclusion.
On one side , Correct article usage
apply
chose
to work after high school has many merits Wrong verb form
choosing
such
as practical experience and work place
skills. If Correct your spelling
workplace
adult
Fix the agreement mistake
adults
opt
to enter in Change the verb form
opts
worklife
they can gain more experience Correct your spelling
work life
like
teamwork, management and Change preposition
in
aome
technical skills. Correct your spelling
some
home
In addition
, people start earing
money at Correct your spelling
earning
young
age they become more independent and it Add an article
a young
boost
their confidence. Change the verb form
boosts
Also
, they can learn to manage their money and time as well
as
they can achieve their possible goals sooner.
Correct word choice
and
On the other hand
, Attending university
or college is also
a wise choice. To commence with, ut
offers significant income. Professional workers gain higher salaries than those who are working without any structured training. Correct your spelling
it
For example
, Doctors and engineers has
higher income Change the verb form
have
inspite
of they work fewer hours Correct your spelling
in spite
comapre
to other workers because of their education. Correct your spelling
compare
compared
Furthermore
, University
provides Correct article usage
the University
in depth
knowledge in any field. Add a hyphen
in-depth
Hence
, opportunity
for employment increases. Another point is that the social position of Add an article
the opportunity
an opportunity
educated
individual is considerably high as everyone respect them.
To recapitulate, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above one can reach to conclusion that , working straight after completing high school has its own benefits like Add an article
the educated
real life
experience. Add a hyphen
real-life
However
I believe opting Add a comma
,However
studying
Change the verb form
to study
further
in college or university
provides numerous advantages to individuals.Submitted by bhumikashah1414 on
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