Some young people go to college or university to have a successful career path. Others, however, chose to go straight to work to gain real-life experience after high school. Discuss both views and write your opinion.

In today's society , There is
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debate regarding
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between entering
workforce
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or
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to study in college or
university
after high school. some people believe that studying
further
has more advantages
while
others argue against that.
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the
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sides and will reach to conclusion. On one side ,
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to work after high school has many merits
such
as practical experience and
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skills. If
adult
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opt
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to enter in
worklife
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work life
they can gain more experience
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teamwork, management and
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some
home
technical skills.
In addition
, people start
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money at
young
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age they become more independent and it
boost
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their confidence.
Also
, they can learn to manage their money and time
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they can achieve their possible goals sooner.
On the other hand
, Attending
university
or college is
also
a wise choice. To commence with,
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offers significant income. Professional workers gain higher salaries than those who are working without any structured training.
For example
, Doctors and engineers
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higher income
inspite
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in spite
of they work fewer hours
comapre
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compare
compared
to other workers because of their education.
Furthermore
,
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provides
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knowledge in any field.
Hence
,
opportunity
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the opportunity
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for employment increases. Another point is that the social position of
educated
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individual is considerably high as everyone respect them. To recapitulate, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above one can reach to conclusion that , working straight after completing high school has its own benefits like
real life
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experience.
However
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I believe opting
studying
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to study
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further
in college or
university
provides numerous advantages to individuals.
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