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A lot of money is spent nowadays searching for oil. As the world's oil resources will eventually run out, it would be more logical to spend some of this money on developing new sources of power, such as wind and solar. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Oil
 is an essential source of
energy
 and a heavy amount of money is spent in order to find more. It is true that with increasing populations one day it comes to an end so, it is beneficial to figure out an alternative to
oil
 and spend money on advanced resources of
energy
 like hydro, tidal, and light
energy
.
However
, I believe that it is good to have an option like solar and wind power because, in times of need, they act as life savers and help many individuals to do their
work
 at the time. I will discuss in my essay below why I am in
favor
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 of the above statement.
Firstly
, the search operations for
oil
 are expensive and time-consuming and a heavy amount of funds are required to do
such
 searches.
Therefore
 spending on it will affect the other sectors and eventually lead the government to face financial issues.
As a consequence
, it is better to have other options like teaching people how to utilize solar panels and make electricity through them to pursue their
work
.
Secondly
, these are natural resources and require less finance and do a lot of
work
 for companies
also
, it is budget friendly that why many people start the installation of solar panels and consume
energy
 from them. By doing
such
work
 it proves beneficial not only for the nation but
also
 for the government so they can provide their country with more facilities. In conclusion,
although
oil
 is a basic need with time other resources replace it.
Consequently
, it is good to learn about others' power
as well as
 to improve the way of living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • finite
  • renewable energy sources
  • expenditure
  • compromise
  • sustainable
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructure
  • economic sustainability
  • dependency
  • fluctuating prices
  • stimulate
  • job creation
  • vested interests
  • transition
  • reluctance
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