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Some people think that governments should spend money for faster public transportation, others think that there are other important priorities (e.g. cost, environment). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #governments #money #transportation #priorities #e #g #cost #environment
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It is often argued that governments should invest
to
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 rapid public
transportation
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,
while
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 others insist that it is more crucial
things
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to things
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 like cost,
environment
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and environment
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. From my perspective, the former seems more
seems more
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plausible, but both sides of the issue will be examined in
this
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 essay.
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 with, some
people
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 claim that governments should provide various
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society
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policy
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policies
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 for
citizen
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citizens
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.
Firstly
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,
due to
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financial
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the financial
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 crisis, many
people
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 become
the
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jobless, so
people
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 have
difficult
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a difficult
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 economy. The
society
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 should provide basic income to the unemployed
people
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. If they don’t have
a
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money, they
could not
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cannot
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anymore
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apply
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use public
transportations
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transportation
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.
As a result
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,
the
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society
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 should
decided
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 to
propolites
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propose
policy
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a policy
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.
Also
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, Modern
society
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increase
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has increased
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 many problems
of
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in
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environment
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the environment
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such
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 as destroyed green land. Because companies build
a lots
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a lot
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 of office buildings, factories and shops. They create huge
amount
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amounts
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 of dust in resulting developing diseases like lung cancer. It menaces citizens’s health. The
people
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 have
duty
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a duty
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 to
be protected
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protect
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 their health
by
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from
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 the government. On the other, it seems more convincing that investing
faster
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in faster
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 public
transportation
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 brings many benefits to
public
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the public
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 and
individual
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individuals
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. First of all,
for
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apply
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building
the
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apply
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new transits
such
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 as
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subway
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the subway
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 and bus, it
need
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needs
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labor
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labour
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. It means constructing
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subway
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a subway
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 provides many jobs to citizens.
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, It increases personal income.
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, The government gains
the
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more taxes
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rise
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the rise
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users
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in users
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 of public
transportation
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. To be specific, if
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subway
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the subway
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 and
bus
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buses
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 are
more
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apply
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the
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apply
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faster and cleaner compared to
fixing
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apply
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the
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apply
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public transit
before
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, most
people
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 want to use those than their
car
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cars
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. Because they save
the
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apply
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money
such
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 as oil, and
times
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time
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whom
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that
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 they waste on the road.
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, They utilize
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subway
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the subway
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 and bus for their
economical
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economic
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 benefits. In conclusion, investment
of
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in
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 rapid public
transportation
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 will
highly
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be highly
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satisfied
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satisfying
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 since it
have
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gives
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 more chances
to
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for
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public
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the public
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 and
people
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.
Hence
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, the value of spending the money to faster transit should not be underestimated
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government expenditure
  • public transportation infrastructure
  • congestion
  • productivity
  • environmental sustainability
  • allocate funds
  • cost-effective
  • balancing priorities
  • reduce carbon emissions
  • urban planning
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