Many people use social media every day to get in touch with others and news events. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
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situation, but personally, I believe there are more disadvantages.
On the one hand, our technology has developed; we can Linking Words
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, we can communicate with each other using social apps like Facebook and Instagram. Linking Words
However
, some people Linking Words
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smartphones the entire time in their houses, so they are apart from society and feel lonely. Use synonyms
For example
, in South Korea, many folks Linking Words
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IT gadgets Use synonyms
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However
, some communities make fake facts and fake Linking Words
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so some individuals believe that and it leads to crime. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, because of that, they stay at home for a long time, which leads to feeling lonely and frustrated. Eventually, they do not want to work, and that kind of life will bring various diseases like obesity and diabetes. Linking Words
Therefore
, communicating with each other using social Linking Words
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, today, we can see Linking Words
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Furthermore
, if some countries start a war, their folks take a photo or record a video and directly upload it to their social accounts so we can find out what is going on. Linking Words
For instance
, Russia and Ukraine started a war in 2021, and many Ukraine buildings were destroyed. But, at that time we did not know what was going on in there and what was true. Russia announced that it did not kill any innocent nations, but a few months later, numerous Ukrainians took photos and videos and uploaded their social Linking Words
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of social apps is beneficial for our societies.
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social Use synonyms
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bad way, it is harmful to our communities but we cannot live with IT devices because Use synonyms
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Task Achievement
The essay addresses the topic and presents both advantages and disadvantages of using social media for communication and news consumption. However, it could provide more specific examples to support the arguments.
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The essay is well-organized with a clear introduction and conclusion. The ideas are presented logically, but the support for main points could be enhanced with more detailed examples.
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