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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart displays the average of expensive metals price, over a nine-period
year
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 between 2013 and 2021.
Overall
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, what stands out from the graph is that gold and palladium of precious metals increased significantly over the entire time period.
Whereas
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 platinum’s metal decreased gradually during the period. Gold was the second biggest metal price in history in 2013 which was just below 1,500
dollars
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 per
oz
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 and declined consistently next two years to around 1,200
dollars
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 per
oz
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 in 2015.
However
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, the figure showed a fluctuation between 2016 and 2019 and it accounted for just under 1,500
dollars
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 per
oz
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.
Then
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, it significantly grew in 2020 and the next
year
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, gold remained relatively stable. Palladium was the lowest
overall
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 user at the start of the period at around 700
dollars
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 per
oz
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 and rose remarkably every
year
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 to nearly 2,500
dollars
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 per
oz
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. Platinum was the largest segment in 2013 and amounted to roughly 1,500
dollars
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 per
oz
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 and
this
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 consistently dropped
year
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 to
year
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 to almost 900
dollars
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 per
oz
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 in 2020.
Nevertheless
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, it climbed and made up just above 1,000
dollars
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 per
oz
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, dollars, oz with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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