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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 for different regions and their associated
wealth
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.
Overall
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, North
America
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 owns the share of
wealth
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,
while
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 Africa and India have the lowest
percentage
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 of
wealth
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. China is the most populated
area
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 in the world,
whereas
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 Rich Asia-Pacific is the least crowded place.
To begin
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, North
America
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 owns 35% of the total
wealth
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 in the world with a little more than 5%
population
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. The second richest
area
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 is Europe with almost a 30% share of global
wealth
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,
while
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 its
crowd
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 is three times of American
population
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. The next rich
area
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 is Rich Asia-Pacific which owns one-fifth of global
wealth
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 and almost equal
population
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 of
America
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. India and Africa are the poorest regions with an insignificant proportion of
wealth
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,
while
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 they have an impressive share of the
crowd
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. India has 15% of the
population
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 and Africa has two-thirds of India’s
crowd
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. The second poor
area
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 is China and other Asia-Pacific with 3% of world
wealth
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. The
percentage
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 of the
population
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 of China and other Asia pacific is 23% and 17% respectively. For Latin
America
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 and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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, the proportion of
wealth
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 is two times
of
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apply
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its
crowd
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percentage
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, 7% of global
wealth
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population, wealth, america, area, crowd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • global population
  • distribution of wealth
  • percentages
  • region
  • Asia
  • Africa
  • Europe
  • North America
  • South America
  • Oceania
  • disparity
  • account for
  • follow
  • despite
  • vary
  • demonstrate
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