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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more imporatant environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are so many environmental problems but even
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loss
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the loss
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 of particular species of
plants
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 and
animals
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also
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problem
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. In my own opinion, there are more
imporatant
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important
 environmental
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problem
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problems
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 than
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loss
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the loss
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 of particular species of
plants
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 and
animals
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.
Loss
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 of particular
spies
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species
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 of
plant
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plants
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 and
animals
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also
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problem
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. Each
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plants
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plant
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 and
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animals
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animal
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are
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 an important part
in
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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. To save
plants
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 the
government
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 should make rules for it.
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Indian
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government
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are try
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white
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the white
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 tiger to save
animals
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a
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 public should
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 contribute
in
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to
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 saving
animals
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 and
plants
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.
Due to
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,
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loss
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the loss
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 of
plants
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an
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and
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animals
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 public should support NGOs. People should save street
animals
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 and birds because it there
reponsiblty
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responsibility
responsibly
. Other than
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loss
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the loss
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 of
plants
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 there are other more environmental
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problem
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problems
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 like saving
trees
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, air
pollution
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,
noice
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noise
pollution
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, land
pollution
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, water
pollution
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 and much more like
this
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 kind. the
government
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 should focus on all types of issues.
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nation
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the nation
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 should focus on saving
trees
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 because
trees
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 play
an
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 great role in
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.
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, the
government
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 should support NGOs
who
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 are improving nature.
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, the
government
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 should spread awareness about its importance. The
government
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 should support NGOs but
public
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the public
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 should save
animals
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 too.
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, By planting more and more
trees
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 many
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problem
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 can be save environmental. Whenever
,
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apply
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 Adopting
animals
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 and
brids
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birds
 can help
environmentenvironmental
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environment environmental
.
To conclude
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, saving
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loss
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the loss
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 of species of
plants
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 and
animals
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 is good but there are so many there
issuse
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issues
 other than
this
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. In my own opinion, there are so many there more
imporatant
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important
environment
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environmental
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 problems.

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