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The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003 to 2012.

The chart shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city center from 2003 to 2012.
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The line graph compares how three different types of crime
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changed in the
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 of Newport City over the period of 9 years.
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of robbery
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 was by far
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 throughout the research period.
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, the figure for burglary experienced the most drastic change from 2003 to 2012. In 2003, the quantity of burglary
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 was highest, at just over 3,400
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. Meanwhile, that of robbery was significantly lower, at nearly 600
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, which was just one-fourth of the figure for car theft, at roughly 2,400
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. In the year 2008, the number of
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 of burglary witnessed a dramatic drop from about 3,400 to more than a thousand
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 it saw a moderate recovery to approximately 1,400
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at the end
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 of the period. At the same time, the figure for car theft
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 climbed slightly by 400 to around 2,800
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whereas
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 that of
incidents
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 of robbery fluctuated between 500 and 1000
cases
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 during all the years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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