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The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
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The display graph shows the sales of children's
books
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, adult fiction and educational
books
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 between 2002 and 2006 in one nation. The sales of three different kinds of
books
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 between 2002 and 2006 in one country. The data is given in millions of dollars. In children's
books
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, in the
year
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 2002, it was more than 30, in the
year
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 2003, it was nearly 40, in the
year
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 2004
as well as
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 2005 it was around 40 and in the
year
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 2006 it was more than 55. In Adult fiction in the
year
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 2002, it was more than 45, in
the
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2003, it was nearly 35, in the
year
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 2004 it
was
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increased by 40, in the
year
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 2005 it was around 35 and in the
year
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 2006, it was 30. In the Educational
books
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, in the
year
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2002
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,2002
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 it was around 25, in the
year
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 2003 it was more than 30, in the
year
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 2004 it was more than 25, in the
year
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 2005 it was more than 26 and in the
year
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 2006, it was more than 30.
To conclude
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, the above information describes
about
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the sales of three different kinds of
books
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 between 2002 and 2006.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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