Some people think that the best way for developing countries to eradicate poverty is to provide six years of free education to every child. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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education
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plays a vital role for an individual
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country's
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a country's
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growth
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however
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because of impoverishment some
people
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can not afford to study
further
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.
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some
people
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believe that offering six year of free
education
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help to combat the problem of
poverty
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. I strongly agree that free
eduucation
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education
is the best way to solve the
poverty
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problem in developing
country
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countries
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.
This
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essay will
further
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elaborate my views
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favouring positive impact. To commence with, If the government provide free
education
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to child it will help to break the shackles of
poverty
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. When children go to school they acquire skills and training in each and
evry
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every
field.
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, it will help them to get better
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job
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as the
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market only allows
people
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to work who have
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education
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an education
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.
Secondly
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, Free
education
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gives them
a vast career options
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vast career options
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as well as
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in depth
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knowledge of
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a perticular
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perticular
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particular
department.So Educated workforce is more likely to contribute to a nation's economic
growth
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through innovation and productivity. Analysing the statement and explaining
further
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,
education
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help
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to maintain gender equality.Both
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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can learn at
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apply
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school and women can
also
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get a chance to work in various
field
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fields
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which
curb
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curbs
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the
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apply
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employment issues which
also
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leads to
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growth
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the growth
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of
country
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the country
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.
Furthermore
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, Free
education
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results in
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a reduaction
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reduaction
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reduction
of child
labor
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labour
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as children who can not afford the educational fees
also
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have
chance
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a chance
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to go to
the
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school. Free
education
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also
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leads to human capital development as
educated
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an educated
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workforce
attract
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attracts
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foreign investment and technological advancement will
leads
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lead
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to economic
growth
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.
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Also
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the
goverment
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government
can publish more
job
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opportunity for poor
people
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can
also
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helps
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help
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for
growth
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.
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, The government of India publish more
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opporutunity
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opportunities
for
people
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which
help
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helps
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them to curb 50% of
poverty
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only by that. To recapitulate, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above
that
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apply
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education
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plays a pivotal role in
economical
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economic
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groeth
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growth
and
to curb
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curbing
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the
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apply
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poverty
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therefore
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i
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believe providing six years of free
education
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help
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helps
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to combat the problem.
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