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In many countries, young children are looked after by other people while parents go out to work. Is it a good thing or a bad thing?

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Nowadays, It is true that young
children
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 are looked after by someone else when their
parents
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 are working.
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this
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trend
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 can be a negative development because
parents
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 should take
care
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 of their offspring by themselves, the main benefits are not only for
parents
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 who work full time but
also
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 for
children
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 themselves. To start with one of the most important reasons why
this
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 is a positive development is that
children
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 are taken
care
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 of by professionals who have the knowledge and
skills
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 to develop
children
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skills
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 like basic vocal and social
skills
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 to prepare them to enter school because young
children
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 can learn how to play, share, respect other people who are not in their family.
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, 80% of year one students who were taken
care
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 of by professional kindergartens get along well with other peers or teachers when they go to schools compared to other students who were looked after by their
parents
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 or relatives. Having them in daycares plays a major role in developing
children
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's
skills
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 at a young age which can be seen as an advantage. Another benefit is that young
parents
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 can continue their careers after their maternity leave. Having infants in daycares can be better for
parents
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due to
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 its convenience.
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, research conducted by Bangkok University, it was revealed that 80% of young
parents
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 in Thailand usually take 6 months of maternity leave and go back to work by putting their young
children
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 in blanket or infant
care
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. So they can contribute to their careers without any worries.
This
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 is popular and plays an important role in
this
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trend
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 and many people think it is a positive
trend
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. In conclusion,
while
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parents
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 go to work,
children
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 are looked after by
children
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 cares. I think there are a couple of benefits to
this
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trend
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 because of its convenience for
parents
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,
the
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skills
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 and knowledge that
children
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 receive from their daycare.
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