The chart gives information abour migration to the UK. The chart shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intented to stay in the UK. And the pir chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.

The chart gives information abour migration to the UK. The chart shows how long immigrants in the years 2000-2008 intented to stay in the UK. And the pir chart shows reasons for migration in 2008.
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The chart depicts information about migrants and emigrants in the United Kingdom measured in thousands of people in 10 periods between 1999 and 2008.
Overall
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it is noticeable that the amount of immigrants is gradually increasing year by year
while
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emigration fluctuated at
same
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level and increased only in the
last
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periods.
To begin
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with, immigration was at the level of 450
thousand
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in 1999 and gradually raised to 500
thousand
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in 2002 and continued the increase,
as a result
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reaching the peak of 0.6 million in 2006.
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, in the next two
years
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the line illustrated a slight decrease compared to the previous one.
On the other hand
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, amount of emigrants in the UK is as not high as the
quantity
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of immigrants. Starting the point with 300
thousand
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, in fact
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it is lower than the 150
thousand
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of individuals compared to immigration. Fluctuating on that point 3 years, it slightly increased to 0.36 million.
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, after years
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fluctuations dramatic elevation peaked
its
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highest
points
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at 400
thousand
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in 2006.
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, in 2008 the number of emigrants reached that point and slightly increased to 420.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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