The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

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The given diagram illustrates the cyclical process of a kind of bee which produces honey from its condition in an egg to the matured form.

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it is clear that

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the natural growth of a honey bee is shaped by six stages.

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This

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process takes approximately 34 to 36 cycles to be completed. Regarding to first half of the steps, in the beginning and after eggs are laid, 9 to 10

days

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are needed for them to be hatched.

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, a period of 5

days

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is taken for the larva to get out of its eggshell and gain the ability to fly for the next 7

days

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. Focusing on the rest of the stages,

while

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the nymph is small in these 7

days

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, it grows gradually in 9

days

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, up to 3 times bigger than its

last

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shape.

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, during

this

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period, the nymph moult loses some feathers, hair and some part of its skin to open more room for

further

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size increases to be fully adult.

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, by the emergence of young bees, after 4

days

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of maturity, the female bees gain the pregnancy ability and lay 2 eggs at maximum every three

days

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and

this

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cycle is restarted.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words days with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

201 words

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The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Somepe people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that language should be taught in small classes, while other people think the number of students in a language class does not matter. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 5.0

In today's globalized world, people from different cultures often come into contact with each other. How do cultural differences affect commucation? What can be done to improve cross-cultural communication?

Some countries have high unemployment rate, so some people think that children should only go to primary school, not high school because they won't find a job later. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The population in most cities is growing as people move to cities to find work and new opportunities. What problem does overpopulation in the cities cause? How can these problems be solved?