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The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996

The graph below shows the number of complaints made about noise to Environmental Health authorities in the city of Newtown between 1980 and 1996
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The line chart illustrates how many
complaints
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 were sent to Environmental Health authorities about sounds that
made
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arose from
road
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works
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, factories,
traffic
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noise
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 and
household
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households
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 in Newtown
city
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City
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 from 1980 to 1996.
Overall
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, we can see that
while
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 there was an upward trend in the
number
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 of
complaints
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 related to
road
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works
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 and
traffic
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noise
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, the
number
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 of
complaints
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 reduced. The
number
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 of
complaints
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 related to factories changed slightly. In 1980, the
number
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 of
complaints
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 about domestic was more than 600 which was the highest
number
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 compared to others. After 16 years
this
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number
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 reached its minimum level
under
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of under
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 200. But the
number
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 of
complaints
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 about factories had the opposite trend. From 1980 to 1980 increased by 200, from 400 to 600. Until 1990,
this
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number
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 steadily increased and reached its peak of roughly 800.
However
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, there was a decrease in the following years and reached about 700. From 1980 to 1988,
traffic
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noise
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 and
road
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works
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 had the same pattern. From 1988 to 1996, the
number
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 of
complaints
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in
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about
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traffic
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noise
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 tripled from 200 to 600,
while
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road
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works
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complaints
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 rose sharply and got 30 times over, from 400 to more than 1200.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, road, works, traffic, noise, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Complaints
  • Environmental Health authorities
  • Noise pollution
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Spikes
  • Fluctuations
  • Time frame
  • Population growth
  • Industrial development
  • Public awareness
  • Implications
  • Addressing the issue
  • Data analysis
  • Year-on-year changes
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