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Technology has developed very fast over the past 100 years. However, some people think that technological progress has brought negative effects on the humanity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 has become the most powerful tool today, Nobody ignores that
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 our life essay than ever been,
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this
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technology
 and will continue my personal view at the conclusion. On the one hand, some people believe that
technology
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thing
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 help us in many ways and make our life fast for everything we need to do
unlike
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the
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 past. An example of News
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 can see it
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 any time. Other things when we mention
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learning and education, Now with
technology
 and the internet we can search
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the
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information and learn whatever we want.
On the other hand
, all of us know that nothing is perfect and everything has a negative
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, There is no limit to
technology
 and anyone can access and do whatever he wants an example of that
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google and you will find it. All in all,
technology
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i
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thinks
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 we can control
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the negative things and use
technology
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 useful
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