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The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.

The table below shows statistics about the top five countries for international tourism in 2012 and 2013.
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The given table demonstrates the information regarding the highest-ranking
countries
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 in terms of the
number
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 of international
tourists
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 in a period of two years. As an overview, France had the highest
number
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 of international
visitors
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 in 2012 and 2013 among other given
countries
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.
However
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, the country that had the highest income in
this
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 over 2-year was the USA. As
it
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can be seen, France was the most popular destination among other
countries
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 with 83 and 84.7
million
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tourists
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 in both 2012 and 2013 respectively.
While
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 some
countries
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 experienced a noticeable increase in the
number
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 of their
tourists
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 in 2013 like the USA and Spain with roughly 3 more
million
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visitors
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, China and Italy's
number
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 of
visitors
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 decreased by approximately 2
million
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 and achieved 55.7 and 47.7
million
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visitors
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 that year respectively.
On the other hand
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, the country that gained the highest revenue for its international
tourists
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 was the USA by far with $126.2
billion
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 in 2012 and 139.6
billion
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 in 2013 which was unexpected. The second place belongs to Spain which gained $60.4
billion
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 in 2013.
Furthermore
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, both Italy and France
visitors
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 spent more money in 2013.
This
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 increase was equivalent for both of those
countries
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 by approximately $3
billion
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 more than the previous year.
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, China experienced a negligible rise in its remuneration from its
tourists
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 and achieved 51.7
billion
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 that year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, number, tourists, visitors, million, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourist arrivals
  • influx of tourists
  • economic impact
  • job creation
  • infrastructure development
  • revenue generation
  • geographical distribution
  • popular destination
  • regional analysis
  • natural attractions
  • cultural heritage
  • seasonal trends
  • tourism patterns
  • climatic conditions
  • tourism preferences
  • adventure tourism
  • eco-tourism
  • cultural tourism
  • holiday seasons
  • local events
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