Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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in the world, some people thinks

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both sides, and I will write my opinion in conclusion. On

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hand,

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life easy

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us with communication and

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the world like a small village. We cannot stop using

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you want to send a message or make a conversation

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a person that

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far away from us we just need

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Internet and a WhatsApp message without

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to him.

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, some people think that

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a problem with social interaction and

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in the same house, and they

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each other by WhatsApp without meeting each other and

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is a big problem for our community and it's affecting my people they just want to live alone without any communication. All in all,

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a good and bad

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using

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communication.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Some people argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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