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**The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013.**

**The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013.**
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The display chart describes
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the ratio of
income
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 to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in the year 2013. The data is about
America
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income
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as well as
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expenditures
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.
Income
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, in <25 there was more than 20000, in 25-34 there was more than 55000, in 35-44
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 in 45-54 there was nearly 80000, in 55-64 there was around 75000, in 65-74 there was around 55000 and in >75 there was around 35000. In
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 the highest was in 45-54 with around 60000, in <25 there was 30000, in 25-34 there was 45000, in 35-44 there was 60000, in 55-64 there was 60000, in 65-74 there was 50000 and in >75 there was 30000. The data is in dollars.
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 is more
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 to
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. The data is from <25 to >75.
To conclude
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, the above information describes
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income
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 and
expenditures
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 in dollars in America.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, expenditures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "describes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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