The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
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bar chart, Change preposition
The
It
shows the Correct pronoun usage
apply
overall
population in the United Kingdom , who is instructed to consume fruit and vegetables by
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on
daily
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a daily
baseies
. In the Correct your spelling
basis
bases
year
2002, 2006 and 2010.
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years
Overall
, the chart illustartes
peoples ( Correct your spelling
illustrates
men
, women, children), who is recommended to consume fruit and vegitablen
in three years.
At the beginning, of 2002 women Correct your spelling
vegetables
vegetable
consumes
more healthy foods rather than Change the verb form
consume
men
and children, at
the same Change preposition
in
year
the second highest presentage
is Correct your spelling
percentage
men
, they are the ones how
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who
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to capture
capture
the second most Wrong verb form
captured
pacle
in Correct your spelling
pace
this
year
and finaly
the Correct your spelling
finally
last
place goes to children because they prefer junk foods compared to good ones.
Furthermore
, women are the ones , who are more likely to eat healthy
in all three years and the highest Change the word
healthily
persentage
of 32 lies in the Correct your spelling
percentage
year
2006 . The recommended fruit and veg to
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for
men
is
high in the Wrong verb form
was
year
2006 and it reduced to 24 % in 2010 ,Likewise
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,Likewise
childrens
are Correct your spelling
children
steping
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stepping
in to
good habit day by day and their progress Join the words
into
reaches
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reached
to
16% in 2006 and it slightly Change preposition
apply
skrink
in 2010 by 14%.Correct your spelling
shrink
skink
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