The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
According to the
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bar chart,
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apply
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shows the
overall
population in the United Kingdom , who is instructed to consume fruit and vegetables
by
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on
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daily
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a daily
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baseies
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basis
bases
. In the
year
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years
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2002, 2006 and 2010.
Overall
, the chart
illustartes
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illustrates
peoples (
men
, women, children), who is recommended to consume fruit and
vegitablen
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vegetables
vegetable
in three years. At the beginning, of 2002 women
consumes
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consume
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more healthy foods rather than
men
and children,
at
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in
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the same
year
the second highest
presentage
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percentage
is
men
, they are the ones
how
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who
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capture
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captured
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the second most
pacle
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pace
in
this
year
and
finaly
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finally
the
last
place goes to children because they prefer junk foods compared to good ones.
Furthermore
, women are the ones , who are more likely to eat
healthy
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healthily
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in all three years and the highest
persentage
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percentage
of 32 lies in the
year
2006 . The recommended fruit and veg
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for
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men
is
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was
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high in the
year
2006 and it reduced to 24 % in 2010 ,
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,Likewise
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the
childrens
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children
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are
steping
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stepping
in to
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into
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good habit day by day and their progress
reaches
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reached
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to
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apply
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16% in 2006 and it slightly
skrink
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shrink
skink
in 2010 by 14%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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