The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solitions.

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I would like to tell you about my summer holidays.

This

holidays

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for me was very special and unique

compare

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to all other holidays.

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with,

this

summer I have

been

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visited many countries.

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, Poland, Italy,

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the UK

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and Switzerland

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. These countries I have visited for different purposes.

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Italy and Switzerland I visited because I had

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there.

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the UK

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for education and Poland

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with some of my relatives.

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, as I mentioned before I had competition abroad

as well as

in Ukraine.

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year I have become

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champion

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of Ukraine and a finalist

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a European

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European

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competition.

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was astonishing and unforgettable.

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and

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seen many famous and popular sights and tourist attractions.

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London

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I have visited Oxford,Cambridge and Brighton.

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, I met new people

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from different

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of the

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. Evident, that I

also

enhance my level of English. In conclusion, I very enjoy my summer and I will remember it for all my life.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

174 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solitions.

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International communities should act immediately to encourage countries to reduce the consumption of fossil fuels, such as oil and gas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many claims that the fast-food industry had a negative effect on the environment, eating habits, and families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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