The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solitions.

I would like to tell you about my summer holidays.
This
holidays
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for me was very special and unique
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to all other holidays.
To begin
with,
this
summer I have
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visited many countries.
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, Poland, Italy,
UK
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,
Switzerland
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and Switzerland
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. These countries I have visited for different purposes.
For example
Italy and Switzerland I visited because I had
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there.
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, I visited
UK
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for education and Poland
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with some of my relatives.
Furthermore
, as I mentioned before I had competition abroad
as well as
in Ukraine.
This
year I have become
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champion
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of Ukraine and a finalist
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of
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a European
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European
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competition.
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,
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to
UK
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was astonishing and unforgettable.
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, I have been
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seen many famous and popular sights and tourist attractions.
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, apart
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London
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I have visited Oxford,Cambridge and Brighton.
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, I met new people
who
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from different
part
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of the
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. Evident, that I
also
enhance my level of English. In conclusion, I very enjoy my summer and I will remember it for all my life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dramatically
  • glorification
  • desensitize
  • mimic
  • economic factors
  • survival
  • necessities
  • inadequate
  • viable alternative
  • parental engagement
  • strict regulations
  • low-income
  • quality of education
  • access
  • workshops
  • counseling
  • supervision
  • peer groups
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