Some people argue that the public should be allowed to have guns. Others do not. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Indeed in today's world safety is
major
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cocern
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concern
for people
therefore
some people claim that the government should allow the public to keep
firearms
while
others argue that it should be banned for
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the genral
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genral
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general
public.
This
essay will
further
elaborate
both
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perspectives before offering my own opinion on
this
matter. Analysing
former
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the former
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statement and explaining
further
, There are certain benefits to
own
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a gun
such
as
self-defence
and
for
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hunting and
sport activity
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sports activities
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.
To begin
with, some advocates believe that
guns
can
be use
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as a tool for
self-defence
to save their friends and family in some
crtical
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critical
situations like robbery and some inappropriate
crime
scene
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scenes
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.
For example
, In
U.S.A
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the U.S.A
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most of the
liquer
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liquor
liqueur
store and gas station have shown
higher
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a higher
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ratio of theft so,
populace
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the populace
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demand to keep the pistol for
self-defence
in
this
kind of situation. Another
view point
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viewpoint
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is that an armed populace can act as a deterrent to criminal activity. If citizens are armed
then
wrongdoers may be less likely to commit any
crime
however
there is a plethora of disadvantages
of
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to
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owning
guns
. The weight of evidence suggests that
,
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there are numerous disadvantages of keeping
firearms
. First and foremost is public safety . If people
is
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armed it can lead to deathly conditions as
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the slightest
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arguments between
riverls
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rivals
rivers
drivers
provoke
oneanother
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one another
to use rifles or pistols
as well
as
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and
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it will increase
crime
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rate. Readily
avialable
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available
weapons can lead to major accidents and incidents of domestic violence.
Furthermore
, keeping
guns
at home can lead to accidental
shooting
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shootings
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as children
doesnt
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doesn't
know how
dengerous
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dangerous
it can be .
Thirdly
, some recreational
activies
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activities
like hunting and other sports activity involving
guns
results
very
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in very
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hazardous
consequnces
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consequences
. Keeping
guns
should be banned as it will create some
humoungus
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humongous
circumstances
such
as mass
shooting
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shootings
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. To illustrate, the government of Australia banned
firearms
after
mass
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a mass
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shooting in 1996 . To recapitulate, by agglomerating all the points aforementioned above, there are some benefits to
have
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guns
such
safety
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as safety
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and
self-defence
however
there
more
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are more
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drawbacks
of
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to
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keeping
firearms
like
increase
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an increase
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in
crime
rate and accidental shooting. I believe that
government
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the government
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should
bane to
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have any kind of weapons as it will create chaos in society
therefore
i
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equivocate with the
later
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latter
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notion.
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