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It appears that there is a rise in the number of charity advertisements on both television and the Internet. What can be the reason for this? Is this a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Charity advertisements have been appearing increasingly in
media
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 and on the Internet. There is a debate about what reasons behind that and if it is considered a negative or a positive development. There will be more than several reasons that
people
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 are starting to see them frequently. Society is used to seeing conventional commercials which belong to international companies. There were seldom charity adverts on TV. The reason behind that it used to be quite expensive to give an advertisement on television for them,
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, they didn't want to spend their limited budget on commercials.
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,
media
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 marketing has been developing for many years with e-commerce sales.
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 the development of social
media
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 and marketing, giving advertisements is much easier and cheaper. At the same time, it was realised that donation amounts have been increasing depending on their visibility and their marketing on
media
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. They are now more visible with the help of the Internet. They can reach their
targeting
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 group on both platforms.
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, I believe that it is a positive development. Provided, they have more financial
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, they will help many more poor
people
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. Some
people
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 are still homeless and they need shelter. They are still suffering from hunger.
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, charities need more
support
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 and economic power to give help to individuals. In conclusion, the visibility of the charities should be increased and encouraged on all platforms to provide them with enough financial
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. We all wish that
people
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 never need their
support
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,
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,
this
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 problem hasn't been solved in the world yet.
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