*The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007*

*The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007*
The graph provides information about how many
grams
of three products were consumed from 1981 to 2007.
Overall
, there have been significant changes. The most noticeable was the decrease
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all spreads in 2007. If we look at butter consumption in 1981, it is obvious that it started with the highest scores, which amounted to 140
grams
. After that, in 1986 it reached a peak of 160
grams
.
However
, in subsequent years the usage of butter abruptly declined, ending up with 50
grams
. Consumption of margarine fluctuated till 2001, and
then
, there was a dramatic drop in 2007. It seems that, in 1996 there was
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new product launch, which was called low fat/reduced spreads.
Although
Low-fat products were not widespread till 1996, they significantly gained
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popularity in 2001.
To sum up
, butter and margarine were the most popular spread in 1981, but in 2007 low-fat items gained more popularity than others
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