The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
The graph illustrates the shift in 3 different foods which are consumed by Chinese people over 25 years. It is presented about consuming food in
grams
/person/week.
Overall
, the
consumption
of fish was significantly increased in the period.
While
meat and salt had different trends which steadily went up and down, both foods were met at the same figure by 2010. As can be seen from the graph, fish
consumption
was settled at the highest than other foods by a
number
of 600
grams
in 1985. In the following
years
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the trend fluctuated, it started to rise in the next 5 years to 700
grams
,
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but
then
dropped by a
number
of 600
grams
in 1995.
However
, the
consumption
of fish has increased to about 8500, which was the highest amount in 2014. Meat and salt had a different start in 1985. Salt
consumption
started at almost a
number
of 500
grams
,
while
it decreased by 300
grams
at
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2010 became 200
grams
. The
consumption
of meat gradually went up by 100
grams
and finished
by
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the same
number
of salts at 200
grams
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, consumption, number with synonyms.
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