The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
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The graph illustrates the shift in 3 different foods which are consumed by Chinese people over 25 years. It is presented about consuming food in
grams
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/person/week.
Overall
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, the
consumption
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of fish was significantly increased in the period.
While
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meat and salt had different trends which steadily went up and down, both foods were met at the same figure by 2010. As can be seen from the graph, fish
consumption
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was settled at the highest than other foods by a
number
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of 600
grams
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in 1985. In the following
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the trend fluctuated, it started to rise in the next 5 years to 700
grams
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,
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but
then
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dropped by a
number
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of 600
grams
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in 1995.
However
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, the
consumption
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of fish has increased to about 8500, which was the highest amount in 2014. Meat and salt had a different start in 1985. Salt
consumption
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started at almost a
number
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of 500
grams
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,
while
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it decreased by 300
grams
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at
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2010 became 200
grams
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. The
consumption
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of meat gradually went up by 100
grams
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and finished
by
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with
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the same
number
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of salts at 200
grams
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, consumption, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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