The Graph Below Shows The Average Number Of Vietnamese Students Studying In France, America And Russia Between 2000 And 2015
The line graph provides information about the average
number
of Vietnamese
student
studying in four countries (Fix the agreement mistake
students
France
, Germany
, the US and Canada
) from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
, all
the average Correct determiner usage
apply
number
of Vietnamese
student studying in four countries were upward trend.
The US and Canada
are two
country
Change to a plural noun
countries
were
the biggest change. Correct your spelling
where
France
and Germany
were fluctuation
. Replace the word
fluctuating
Two
countries considerable
rise are the US and Change preposition
with considerable
Canada
, there
started from under a million, but there Correct pronoun usage
They
was
different increases. The US Change the verb form
were
significant
grew. It increased from under a Change the word
significantly
millions
to five Change to singular
million
millions
Change to singular
million
increased
almost Verb problem
apply
to reach
a peak from 2000 to 2015. Change the verb form
reaching
Canada
gradual
rose, it Change the word
gradually
also
climbed from under a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a million
millions
millions
but only to two
millions
between 2000 and 2015. The Change to singular
million
remaning
Correct your spelling
remaining
two
country
Change to a plural noun
countries
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
France
and Germany
fluctuated. France
, it rose from 2010 to 2015 in
approximately 4,5 Change preposition
by
millions
Change to singular
million
although
decrease
slightly from 2000 to 2010. Wrong verb form
decreased
Germany
, it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
was growth
from 2010 to 2015 but only climbed to approximately 2,5 Verb problem
grew
millions
and gradually Change to singular
million
fall
between 2000 and 2010. The average Wrong verb form
fell
number
of Vietnamese
students studying in the US accounts for the highest percentage with nearly reaching the peak and the average number
of Vietnamese
students studying in Canada
accounts for the lowest percentage with 2 million students.Submitted by huaishang90 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, vietnamese, france, germany, canada, two, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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