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Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinions.

#religion #schools
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It is a common belief that the act of including or incorporating
religion
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 into the school curriculum is essential.
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, there is a more persuasive argument that
students
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 should be taught only academic subjects at
schools
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both views but personally, I am of the belief that the inclusion of
religion
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 in school subjects should be excluded. On the one hand, supporters of teaching
religion
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 in
schools
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 argue that religious education plays a role in shaping
students
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' ethical
behavior
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. By learning about
religion
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, people are always encouraged to be good citizens, to earn their income ethically, and to refrain from engaging in activities
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 as stealing and hurting others, which are considered sins.
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, some parents may be too busy with their work commitments to teach their children about rituals,
religion
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, and cultures.
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, they prefer
schools
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 that offer dedicated religious classes.
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, certain Christian
schools
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 provide both academic and religious subjects for
students
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 to study.
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, those who hold an opposing view argue that it would not be logical to teach every child the same
religion
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, especially in countries with diverse backgrounds. Parents may not allow their children to learn about religions other than their own.
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, implementing religious education in the school curriculum may lack educational value. Currently, parents enroll their children in top-performing
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 based on qualifying exams which pave the way for university admission and career pursuits.
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, studying Buddhism may have no impact on someone's career choice of becoming an engineer;
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, it should not be included in institutions. In conclusion,
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 teaching
religion
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 can offer benefits
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 as promoting ethical
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 among
students
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 and providing knowledge of different faiths, these advantages are outweighed by its inefficiency and
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 divisive nature.
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, it would be more appropriate for religious education to be conducted within specific places of worship where people with similar beliefs gather together.
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coherence cohesion
Good organization of ideas overall; ensure a clear and consistent opinion throughout the essay.
task achievement
Ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed in detail, providing balanced arguments for both perspectives.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • religious education
  • multi-faith society
  • values and ethics
  • tolerance
  • diversity
  • religious freedom
  • secular education
  • curriculum
  • worldviews
  • interfaith dialogue
  • religious literacy
  • moral guidance
  • cultural understanding
  • critical thinking
  • respect
  • indoctrination
  • religious beliefs
  • secular state
  • religious extremism
  • academic subject
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