Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time í the lost of particular of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It has been observed that environmental degradation is one of the most important
concern
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concerns

The singular countable noun concern follows the quantifier one, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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of
modern
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the modern

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era. It is said that
extinction
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the extinction

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of animals and plants
are
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is

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the major consideration
while
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some people believe that there are other major environmental problems that can
be
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apply

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global warming and climate change that
needs
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need

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to be addressed internationally in order to secure the global world. Advocates of securing flora and fauna give
the
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apply

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various reasons to secure them.
The humans
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Humans

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are mainly dependent upon them
either
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apply

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in the form of food and transportation.
Furthermore
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, animals are
the
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a

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great source of protein and
diary
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dairy

The word diary doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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items and plants enrich in
its
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the

The word its may be incorrect in this context. Consider changing it.

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beneficial nutrients that are crucial for human health.If the animals
eradicate
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are eradicated

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from the earth, the poor people whose income depends upon them can be
deterimental
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detrimental

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to
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in

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their financial matters.
For example
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, the Srilankan legume tree
die
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died

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out in
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the 1980's

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1980's
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1980

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that
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which

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are the main producers of lentils.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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