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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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There is no doubt that living in a comfortable and safe place is a basic human need.
While
 some
people
 believe that renting a house is more convenient than owning one, others argue that having an owned property is highly essential. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I agree completely with the latter statement.
To begin
 with, having a place that
people
 own can provide a sense of belonging, as they have a place they can call home.
Moreover
,
this
 can make them feel in control
with
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 their lives,
for example
, no one can ask them to leave.
Also
, they are able to decorate and renovate their homes to their liking without an annoying landlord nagging them about it.
As a result
,
people
 can feel more safe and think more about improving their families' lives and bonding with their children.
Furthermore
, owning a house can be a huge financial investment in the long term if the housing prices go up, so they can feel more financially stable.
Also
, the monthly mortgages ,they are paying, benefit only them, the owners, not
a
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 landlord;
however
, renting a house
dose
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 not bring any financial benefit
for
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 the tenants.
This
 can make
people
 have some peace of mind and
do
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not worry about their financial future. In conclusion,
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the social and financial benefits of owning a home can make families feel more safe about their future. Personally, I strongly believe that having an owned property is more rewarding than renting one, especially in the long term.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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