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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, our technology has developed and started to upgrade day by day. Worldwide people are paying for the apps which they need and becoming popular. I strongly believe it is advantageous for personal growth
as well as
 for the respective countries.
Firstly
, it is normal practice for all age groups to use cell phones and pay for the website or
app
 which will help them to get knowledge about specific things were they looking for. for kids is
also
 useful it increases their listing power and identifies objects
such
 as animal names etc.
For example
, in India they have launched an
app
 which is useful to all kind of students called NCRT it enhances the idea in a brief and help them to understand.
Moreover
, most of the governments
also
 introduce their
app
 to provide them with information for the respective departments.
On the other hand
, it has disadvantages as well. Most teenagers misuse the
app
 to scam people and do not utilise it in the proper manner.
For instance
, There was a small village in north India where all the young teenagers were involved in money laundry crimes they had missed using the
app
.
Furthermore
, nowadays every one of us spends our time watching tikTok or reels
this
 not help us to grow our knowledge. To sum, up, there are pros and cons to the
app
's use in countries it helps poor people with educational knowledge which will help them to grow. Communities take advantage of the
app
 to destroy others. I personally believe
this
 is advantageous for the new population.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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