You have a friend who lives in a city abroad. You have decided that you would like to apply to do a course at one of the colleges in the city. Write a letter to your friend:, 1.Explain what you like to do. 2.Tell him/her what type of work or studies you had completed. 3.Ask for assistance in connecting an appropriate institution

Dear Aman, Hope you are doing great.It has been
while
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meeting to
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you.
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I am deciding to move to the city you are residing in for my
further
studies. My interest is in Financing services for which I have heard that there are great opportunities in
this
city.
Moreover
, studying out of my country will allow me to explore and learn more about
the
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International companies and firms. I wanted to pursue
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Business
Studies as my
majors
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major
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which will cover
the
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courses like financing,
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and Businees
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Businees Mathematics
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business mathematics
.
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, after completing my secondary
eductation
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education
in commerce, I had
also
done courses like
Accountings
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,
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and statastical
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statastical
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statistical
marketing
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.
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In fact
, these courses are going to be a good asset for me if I will choose Business Mathematics. It has been three years of you studying there, it would be really helpful if you
will
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provide the list of
best
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the best
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colleges which
offers
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this
course and
there
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their
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specific requirements.
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, I have
also
done some
reasearch
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research
but
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your guidance will
going to
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really help me. I am really looking forward to
meet
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you as soon as possible. Yours lovingly, Jashan
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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  • thirdly
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