The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960.
The presented diagrams
shows
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a
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the
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development of
Hospital
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a Hospital
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called Queen Mary
for
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40-year
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a 40-year
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span,
since
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from
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its original construction in 1960 till 2000.
Overall
, the comparison of 3 diagrams illustrates
a
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the
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dramatic changes that have taken place at
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
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. The crucial development was an expansion of
cancer
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the cancer
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centre
and nursing
school
. The
noticable
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noticeable
change
is
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closing
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the closing
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of the shopping
centre
and farmland, which were located controversy to
hospital
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the hospital
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and replaced by
nursing
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the nursing
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school
,
cancer
cnetre
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centre
and pharmacy in 1980. The pharmacy was built right near the hospital. So,
shopping
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the shopping
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centres
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centre
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land was divided
to
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two,
where
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which
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now exist
cancer
centre
and
pharmacy
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a pharmacy
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.
Also
, the car park's size was decreased twice
same
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the same
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as
nursing
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the nursing
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school
. The reason for these
change
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changes
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is
expansion
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an expansion
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of
cancer
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the cancer
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centre
, which
now
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is now
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located
on
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previous
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the previous
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nursing
school
's place. The main road remained unchanged as Queen Mary Hospital.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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