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Companies now prefer to hire people with good social skills as well as good academic qualifications. Do you think that social skills are now getting more important than educational qualifications?

#companies #people #skills #qualifications
Nowadays, it is being preferred by global and big companies to hire individuals with both social and educational
skills
. I
Personally
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 believe that having good
communication
skills
are
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 prioritised by
company
 managers. Academic qualification and university education
is
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a necessary
aspect
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 for
hireing
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hiring
 people by global and famous companies. There are some special occupations which require graduate or post-graduate degrees.
Forinstance
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For instance
, for doing a heart surgery, only
an
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 professional surgeon should be occupied by the hospital.
Additionally
, in developed countries,
the
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industrial parts
such
 as factories and manufacturing firms need engineers who are familiar with
mathemathical
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mathematical
 and physical complications
as well as
 repair and run the vehicles.
Therefore
, getting assistance from a person with significant
skills
 about these criteria rather than a person with just good social
skills
 would benefit and contribute
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company
 to
a
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better future efficiency.
However
, I am of the opinion that good social and
communication
skills
 would be an
essentional
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essential
 and preferred property for employing individuals. I believe that a manager with good leadership
skills
 can motivate the employees as well
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 the whole
company
.
Moreover
, a person with
satisfied
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 level of
communication
 can make the
work's
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 environment
more
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friendy
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 and increase the sense of
trustworthy
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 and reliability among all staff.
Additionally
, living in a world of business would force employers to allocate
huge
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 amount of time to choose the best options for
hireing
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hiring
.
For example
, in a sale
company
,which reserved goods
to
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 customers,
the
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customer service play a vital role
for
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 convincing customers. In order to be a good customer
servicer
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, knowing
about
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how to speak is one of the undeniable parts. In conclusion, having a convincing level of
academical
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 education is a crucial factor for some occupations,
although
 I think that in the business
world
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 a good speaker with
the
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 satisfying level of
communication
 would be more successful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Collaboration
  • Teamwork
  • Leadership
  • Automation
  • Cultural awareness
  • Specialized fields
  • Academic credentials
  • Professional development
  • Networking
  • Cognitive abilities
  • Soft skills
  • Hard skills
  • Adaptability
  • Problem-solving
  • Emotional quotient (EQ)
  • Intellectual quotient (IQ)
  • Workforce dynamics
  • Social aptitude
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