Today people are surrounded by advertising. This affects what people think is important and has a negative impact on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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ubiquitous presence in our life from TV, radio and social media. Some

people

argue that

adverts

has

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many positive

impact

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on life

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some

people

thinks

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that it has more drawbacks than benefits. I agree that

commercials

have more disadvantages and

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impact

negatively

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people

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argument. To commence with,

adverts

have some significant

downside

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downsides

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. First and foremost is that

adverts

manipulate consumers. Advertising creates false needs and desire in

consumer

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that leads to overspending money and debt.

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, its unrealistic standards as

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gives

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incorrect information on beauty

products

and other cosmetics.

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, Advertisement on makeup product shows famous model applying

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of MAC company and most

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female impulsively buy that product without even consulting any dermatologist if

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good for their skin or not.

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commercials

also

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enviroment

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environment

as overconsumption leads to

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environmental

degradation and waste. Analysing statement and explaining

further

adverts

also

affects

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youth's behaviour. Most of the

advertise

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advertisements

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target children as they have enough maturity to understand what they need and what not.

Hence

they start to demand

unneccesary

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unnecessary

products

from their parents by watching the

advertisemnet

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advertisements

. Another point is economic pressure and materialism.

People

feel peer pressure as everyone thinks that only branded clothes and

products

prooves

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wealthness

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wealth

and

standard

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standards

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Therefore

Therfore

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people

give more importance to

material

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than the relationships .

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commercials

also

has

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some positive

impact

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provides

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detailed knowledge about

products

and keep

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us with new

products

and

its liability

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their liabilities

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. To recapitulate,

commercials

are everywhere from

Televesion

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television

to social platforms.

people

thinks

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that

this

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adverts

negatively

impact

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people

's lives .

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totally agree with

this

statement as

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advertisements

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manipulate consumers and mislead

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them to

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impusive

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impulse

buy the product.

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