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In the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing?

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An ever-increasing record of
air
travel
 has been noticed in the
last
 ten years. It includes several reasons but the most common are awareness, facilities, business trips, and education are the most prominent reasons. I believe that it badly affects the environment
as a result
 of which pollution rises and becomes the reason for ozone depletion. There are
also
 alternative means of
travel
 that are convenient and prevent the surroundings from being polluted. I will elaborate
further
 on these points in my essay below.
Firstly
,
air
travel
 makes it easy to cover long distances in a short period of time. It is happening because of high education levels people know about the things and use them accurately.
Moreover
, the rapid increase in advanced technology like smartphones, laptops, and smartwatches makes it clearer and tells the way to be followed by people and explore the world without any tour guide. So without thinking for the second time they booked their tickets and went for vacations or either for business purposes without taking so much time.
Besides
 all these, there are
also
 some drawbacks
due to
 the rise in
air
 convince,
although
 it facilitates many individuals it is
also
 harmful to us as it pollutes the
air
 by releasing harmful smoke from the plane engines the chemical reactions occur which depleted the ozone layer.
As a consequence
 of all these people are facing so many respiratory diseases like asthma. In conclusion,
although
 travelling might be the need for someone, those who
travel
 every month just to enjoy themselves and for explorations need to think about others' health and limit their
travel
 and play a role in making the climate clean and clear.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Disposable income
  • Aviation technology
  • Efficient
  • Proliferation
  • Budget airlines
  • Globalization
  • Tourism
  • Social media
  • Promotional activities
  • Economic development
  • Cultural exchange
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Climate change
  • Over-tourism
  • Local resources
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