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The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007.

The table below gives information about rail transport in four countries in 2007.
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The provided table represents statistics about railroad transportation in
Malaysia
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,
Canada
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,
China
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 and UAE in 2007.
Overall
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,
China
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 had the largest
number
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 of
people
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 who used rail transport, accompanied by the longest
distance
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 taken per person.
Conversely
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,
Canada
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 had the smallest figures for both the amount of
people
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 and the
distance
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.
However
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,
this
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 country had the largest figure for cargo-carrying capacity. In terms of the
number
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 of
people
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 using rail transportation, the figure for
China
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 was 27, representing the highest
number
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 of individuals among the other three countries.
On the other hand
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, in
Canada
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, only 0,3 million
people
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 travelled by rail transport, demonstrating the lowest figure of
people
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 in a table, followed by UAE and
Malaysia
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, at 5,5 and 5,9, respectively. Regarding passenger kilometres per individual taken,
China
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 represented the longest
distance
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, which was 1980 kilometres. The UAE and
Malaysia
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 had similar data, and the figures for them were 780 and 770, respectively,
whereas
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Canada
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 had only 80 kilometres per person, which was a notably shorter
distance
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 than other nations had. Surprisingly,
Canada
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 had the largest cardio-carrying capacity (28,2 tons), followed by
China
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 (23,01 tons).
Malaysia
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 had a slightly higher
number
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 than
China
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, 21,9 tons.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, canada, china, number, people, distance with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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