The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

The line graph illustrates the

number

of enquiries received by the Tourist

Information

Office in one city over a six-month

period

in 2011.

Overall

it is noticeable that the

information

received by

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had the highest

number

of enquiries,

while

information

by letter/ email lowest.

Furthermore

, data received by

person

and telephone increased over the

period

in question,

whereas

by letter/ email decreased.

However

,

information

received by telephone had the highest

number

of people before March when

information

got by

person

replaced it.

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with

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, it gradually fluctuated from 900 before April when it

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up to 1600 in the final months. The figure for

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accounted for 400 which rose marginally

untill

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to

800 in March.

Consequently

, it increased significantly to

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enquiries in

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June

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and was the most popular method of receiving

information

throughout the

period

. With regards to

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and email, it maintained the same level before March when it

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progressively to under 400 in May.

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, in the final

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it stayed

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and had the smallest

number

of people over the

period

in question.