Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 150 words

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

150 words
The map illustrates a
city
named Brandfield. As indicated on the map architectures had planned 2 potential areas for shopping malls in the territory.
Overall
, it can be seen that the first site, S1, Is in a space between the Housing estate and the
city
centre
, near the river,
while
the second location, S2, occupies a location below the
city
centre
and industrial area. Regarding to first chosen field, if the shopping mall were placed here, it would be positioned in the north of Brandfield town, between the residential area and the
centre
of the
city
.
Additionally
, it would be encircled by the main road, river, and railway. Focusing on the second location which is under the industrial zone and
city
centre
is in the south-east of the map figure.
while
it would be having higher distances from housing area, it is now surrounded by 2 roads and the railway.
However
, in both projected areas it will be considerably far from the golf course and park.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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