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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
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The line graph illustrates the number of people touring an
island
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 in
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 and compares two different methods of visiting from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total number of
tourists
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 steadily increased. Most visitors stayed on the
island
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 in 2010,
whereas
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 more
tourists
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 chose to stay on cruise ships than on the
island
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 in 2017. It is noticeable that the population of
tourists
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 saw a generally
constent
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constant
consistent
 increase in the Caribbean
island
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, which rose from 1
million
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 to 3.5
million
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apporximately
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approximately
 in 7 years period. Only between 2015 and 2016, the total number of
tourists
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 did not see a change, which is around 2.75
million
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. The majority of
tourists
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 stayed on the
island
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 between 2010 and 2015, but people who stayed on the cruise ships overcomed
who
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those who
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 stayed on the
island
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 in the middle of the year 2015.
Furthermore
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, it's clear that the population
of
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apply
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staying on the
island
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keeped
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remained
 steady between 2013 and 2015, and after
that
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,that
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 it saw a slight decrease.
However
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,
visitors
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visitor
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 spending on cruise ships saw a dramatic increase from 2013 to 2017, which rose from 0.5
million
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 to 2
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, tourists, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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