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The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.

The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.
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The given table has been divided into three columns each of which
represnts
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represents
 some information regarding the
amount
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 of money in 5 different
countires
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countries
. The data given
are concerning
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 the expenditure of food/drinks/
tobacoo
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tobacco
 clothing/footwear and leisure/
education
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 in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey. A glance at the table provided reveals that the parts which were mostly paid for were by far food, beverage and tobacco
whereas
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people
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 in these five countries paid a negligible
amount
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on
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 entertainment and
education
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./ The expenditure on entertainment and
education
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 fell short of the other sectors . The highest
amount
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 of money spent
one
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on
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F
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/D/T was by Turkish
people
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 followed by Irish
people
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 accounting for roughly %29 which was far higher than the amounts in these two countries paid for clothing and footwear. In Ireland , only %6.43 of spending was related to C/
F
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, almost the same
amount
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 spent in Turkey and Spain on these items. The spending on clothing/footwear in Italy was almost half of the money on
F
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/D/T (approximately %17) . Swedish
people
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 spent three times more on
F
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/D/T when compared with C/
F
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( %5.40) and
this
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amount
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 dropped to %3.22 for Leisure/
Education
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that
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 was equal to the
amount
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 paid by Italian
people
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 in
this
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 field. The
least
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lowest
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 rate of spending on L/E belonged to Spain with less than %2.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, education, people, f with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure patterns
  • consumer spending
  • cultural priorities
  • economic conditions
  • disposable income
  • standard of living
  • work-life balance
  • proportion of spending
  • cultural preferences
  • comparison of spending
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