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Some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for student’s home country. What extent do you agree or disagree.

#student’s #home #country
Nowadays studying abroad has emerged as a popular trend. Some believe that there are several benefits of studying abroad for a pupil’s hometown. I would totally agree with
this
 assertion and the explanation will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, since the world today has become more globalized, many
countries
 have been developed.
However
 undeveloped societies have been
cope
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coping
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 with the scarcity of know-how in terms of
nation’s
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the nation’s
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 development and lack of
some
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intellect.
Thus
, studying in developed
countries
 has a positive impact on the enhancement in pupil’s
home
 nations.
As a result
,
students
 receiving new skills can use their abilities
for developing
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 their town.
For instance
, those
students
 who sit in political positions
resulting
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 in developing their
home
country
.
Secondly
, studying in a developed
country
 can open the minds of
students
 because
students
 have a connection
between
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 people from different nations.
Moreover
, they have more chances to get a better job after graduation than those who study in developing
countries
.
For example
, in Thailand
students
 who graduated from
western
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countries
 always get a
high ranking
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 position in famous organizations.
Although
 sometimes brain drain happens because
the
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 standard of living conditions compared to the native
country
, they can bring to their homeland a lot of money by earning in foreign
countries
 which in turn
bring
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 a profound impact on
countries
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the country's
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economical
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 growth. In conclusion, I absolutely agree that studying abroad can provide huge virtues for a student’s
home
country
 in many aspects. They can ultimately benefit their
home
countries
 by making use of their newly acquired knowledge and skills to earn well and become pivotal in the development of their
country
.
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